Tuesday, 22 September 2015

Our recount about our egg race

Walt: think about the purpose and reader by planning my recount.
Wow as us being students doing a strange race that we have never done before in the mornings. Having an egg race was actually a real fun game but super difficult. As us having to do an egg race was strange,not like the teaching Mr Goodwin I know .

Arriving at school and going into our literacy classes we were bored when Mr Goodwin gave us an egg each but before that we had to have a partner. As so my partner was Adriel. We had 1 egg to share and also had the chance to draw a face on it and to give it a name which was Bobby.

Our class thought that Mr Goodwin was talking nonsense until he actually was taking us to the park for a egg race. In this egg race was that we had to race the egg across the park to our partner but we had to put the egg on the spoon. Wow I guess he wasn’t talking nonsense at all.

As for you might ask why we had an egg race, it was because that Mr Goodwin was seeing if we were fragile or that we did not even care about the egg smashing. It was a lot of fun that we had a race to start of the day as it started off well. As well as the class and I knew was that he wanted to test us on how careful we were.

Thinking about the egg race we had it was quite difficult but still fun. For my partner and I we were a little bit upset because I dropped my egg as it was an accident. To speak for the class and myself we all had fun as some had smashed and some survived which was devastating.

Recount Writing

Write for my reader
I've tried to think about my reader
My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.
My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.
My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
I tried to meet the purpose
My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose
The message is clear in some parts of the recount.
My text fully meets the purpose.
The message is clear all through the recount.
My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.
My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.
My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.
My introduction wows my reader!
Paragraph Topics
My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.
I have tried to follow my plan.
Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.
My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea.
I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.
My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.

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