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San Diego zoo virtual tour

Walt: think about my purpose and reader by planning my recount.

Plan of my paragraph topics

1. Introduction	Orientates and hooks
2. Body Paragraph 1	Visiting San Diego zoo online,how and what is a virtual tour,what's good about the virtual tour,
3. Body Paragraph 2	experience’s about what they do with cubs, doing exercise, and keeping animals healthy
4. Body Paragraph 3	individually looking at animals,almost extinct animals and their habitats,
5. Conclusion	What I think about the San Diego zoo

Going on a trip to San Diego zoo, really it’s a virtual tour. Interesting things about the zoo that I saw on the internet, on our chrome-books, (sigh). Would you want to take a virtual tour of San Diego zoo or a real life tour to see the animals in person?.

Today we are learning about the San Diego zoo and is now writing introductions. We learnt that it takes a very long time to write a introduction. We are learning to think about my purpose and reader by planning my recount.

About the Arctic and Antarctica

Walt:  think about my purpose and reader by planing my recount

We are learning to think about my purpose and reader by planing my recount. In writing we are describing our purpose and to only pick one main idea. We have been writing only 1 and only 1 main purpose so that it is easier to understand and explain.

Our recount about our egg race

Walt: think about the purpose and reader by planning my recount.

Wow as us being students doing a strange race that we have never done before in the mornings. Having an egg race was actually a real fun game but super difficult. As us having to do an egg race was strange,not like the teaching Mr Goodwin I know .

Arriving at school and going into our literacy classes we were bored when Mr Goodwin gave us an egg each but before that we had to have a partner. As so my partner was Adriel. We had 1 egg to share and also had the chance to draw a face on it and to give it a name which was Bobby.

Our class thought that Mr Goodwin was talking nonsense until he actually was taking us to the park for a egg race. In this egg race was that we had to race the egg across the park to our partner but we had to put the egg on the spoon. Wow I guess he wasn’t talking nonsense at all.

As for you might ask why we had an egg race, it was because that Mr Goodwin was seeing if we were fragile or that we did not even care about the egg smashing. It was a lot of fun that we had a race to start of the day as it started off well. As well as the class and I knew was that he wanted to test us on how careful we were.

Thinking about the egg race we had it was quite difficult but still fun. For my partner and I we were a little bit upset because I dropped my egg as it was an accident. To speak for the class and myself we all had fun as some had smashed and some survived which was devastating.

Recount Writing
	1	2	3	4
Write for my reader	I've tried to think about my reader	My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.	My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.	My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
Purpose	I tried to meet the purpose	My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose	The message is clear in some parts of the recount.	My text fully meets the purpose. The message is clear all through the recount.
Introduction	My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.	My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.	My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.	My introduction wows my reader!
Paragraph Topics	My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.	I have tried to follow my plan. Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.	My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea. I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.	My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.

The team 4 market day

Walt: write an interesting and detailed recount.
As our market day was on Friday we did it for mostly the whole afternoon block. That was our only market day we had and also was our first but so it went on. For some reason everyone sighed in shame

Our market day was to celebrate our hard work but mostly congratulating our hard work and effort towards our products we made. For my business group home ware we make things for homes,stores and schools. But for my own group we made skull shaped candles that are big and small and also orange peel candles which worked out very well. We had various of choices like candles,soaps,potpourri,air fresheners and so much more. Smelling a lot of nice smells from other trade and enterprise group like kitchen and home ware. With the smell it attracted people to their things and to buy it.

As setting up our business groups we just shuffled tables and chairs also products around and decorated the big space with posters buntings and others. Our group was set up by Miss Lavakula class and along the wet lunch time games. We shifted the tables and put posters on it with our products set on a sheet/lava lava. With a little bit of help we made buntings which are like little cut out flags to put on a long or short piece of string. The lava lava/sheet was to cover the table to make it look nice.

I had my first experience with selling my products which is the first time I've ever did that. As my partner and I sell our products we only had a few knowings about how to sell and what to say to get there attention. As going we did not know what to say so we said something random and poof out of nowhere a Christchurch visitor came and bought one of our orange peel candle and as she bought it she gave us 4 pt. The real cost was only 50 pieces to be honest.

While buying other things we did not know what to buy as then it being different from buying from the shops. As buying for 30 mins we did not really know what to buy from other groups like kitchen,jewels and accessories,musical instruments and custom stationery. As for buying it was hard because others were calling and sometimes shouting loud. Trying to desperately get people to buy from their store.

The market day was awesome  and I didn't really buy anything because I wanted to save my pt’s. It was a lot of fun because there were all kinds of stuff to buy like slingshots,bow and arrow,tin pin bowling gear and sooooo much more. As if this was the best day ever it truly was for everyone. Finding nice and fun things is !!awesome!!.

We are learning to write an interesting and detailed recount. We have learnt to write only 1 big and small main idea in a paragraph or sentence. The task ask us to write a detailed recount and to add lots of interesting words and detailed sentences too.

Marked by Presayus

Poems

Walt: write a poem using nouns, verbs, and adjectives.

Netball

Sweaty, Smelly

Puffing,Passing,Slipping

        Tired.

Rugby

Muddy, Athletic

Sprinting, slipping, competing

        drained   

We are learning to make our own poems using nouns,verbs and adjectives. We have been learning ,to use nouns,verbs and adjectives to use in our poems that we make up. Room 6 literacy is learning to make our own poems like this and that it gives an idea to people who read this.

The making of poems

Walt:  use our inferencing skills to find meaning in the text.

In an early morning                                                                               Waking up early    

We collect ______                                                                             hearing it mumble

to grow even bigger.                                                                           It was a _______    

                                                                                                         

But separates because it was large.                                                  It was in search of its prey.

                                                                                                               Using his paws it scratches.

This won’t’ stop eating as it travels around.             

            It disappears into screen air.                                                          I watch him all morning.

      Coming and seeing

              it was ______________  

              With his nice curly hair     

With ripped shoes but doesn't care.      

                   As him being tall.

              He drinks coffee every morning.

Today we have been doing a activity is which that we 

have to read the poem and write our ideas and because 

why we think that. We have been learning to use our inferencing s

kills to find meanings in the text.

Our trade fair

Walt: use language that paints a picture in the minds of our reader.

This is about a trade fair that team 4 had in week 4. The trade fair we had was something that we take orders from customers as they visit. Trade means the action of buying and selling goods and services, enterprise means a company or business.

Our trade fair was a place that we sell our products that we make in our business groups. We take orders so that we have time to make what our customers want that we have. Others have there own things so that all just don’t have the same. It is like a service thing but a little different from what real ones are.

There are 6 various of groups that we have and they are: Homeware, Kitchen, Musical instrument, Toys,Jewelry and custom stationery. I belong to the homeware group where we sell things that can be used at home or school. The product that my group and I have decided was a skull candle and a orange peel candle. We had presentations to present.

At the trade fair was that we got to walk around seeing the creativity that other people made with what resources they had to make what they decided. My experiences with this is that this was my first school trade the I have ever been to.

In week 8 there will be a market day which is a day that a lot of products that each group make will be sold.

The making of the orders will be done on that day and the ones who ordered will get their thing. The market day is when we get to the fun stuff.

The position in window cleaning

Walt: learn and use new vocab.

Today we are learning to use new vocabulary.  We have been writing a review and job application. The task ask us to read the text and then do our discussion doc.

Using auxiliary verbs

Walt: use auxiliary verbs and using them in sentences.
We are learning to use auxiliary verbs in sentences that we are writing.
Auxiliary verbs are: Am,have,will and was.

My wonderful advice blog

Walt: think critically about what we read.
We are learning how to think critically about what we read. Critically means relating or being the same as a word.
This is an advice blog that we had to do.

My fundraising ski trip

Walt: understand and use new vocabulary.

We are learning to use new vocabulary in a writing and also understand. Our poster is and advertisement poster that tells people information about it and the price,when and where. Also by adding pictures so people can see about what it looks like.

A nice cup of Koko

Walt: put ourselves into the text.

We are learning to write a text and put ourselves into the text. We are doing are poster about a product and our reading. We have learnt to make a poster like an advertisement poster. What we tried to do was to make a poster but like a real one that people put up for other products. My product is a cup of hot Koko(coco).  The task asked us to make a poster and put a picture and a paragraph also information about what product we are going to do.

If i had a million dollars

If I had a million Dollars at the Mall

It would be awesome to have a million dollars because you can buy a lot of things and have way enough money. You don’t even have to look at the price you can just take it. Having a million dollars would be a dream.

I would buy a lot of really cool nerf guns. Nerf guns are super cool because you can have battles and could buy the whole set. Wouldn’t it be mind-blowing to have nerf guns?. If i saw them I would buy all the different kinds of toy guns.

I would buy everything so i could play on all the things i bought. I could play any games and can download on a device. Instead of waiting i could do downloads on all of them.

Having all of this will be breathtaking.

Footlocker Wow i could get me any shoes i want even those most expensive ones. Wouldn’t all this money be cool using it at footlocker?. If i were to buy the most overpriced shoes then i’ll just buy all of them.

Buying all this stuff would be enjoyable, however it won’t really be handy towards my life. Although a million dollars would be cool but maybe i should be responsible and use all this money on good use. What I could do is that I can give money to people who really need it like help people who are homeless and that who have cancer. What would you do with a million dollars.

Jungle rush board game

We learnt to make our own board game.